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Nov 4, 2006 21:47:11 GMT -5
Post by amber on Nov 4, 2006 21:47:11 GMT -5
Let me be the first to post a poem... Now please tell me what you think......Its not great but i don't think it really bad either....its in between....Dont be afraid to tell me what you really think...this is kind of the spear of the moment thing...... Untitled Up ahead is the path. The path that leads to the future. Do you take the path or do you stand still? The path may bring you joy The path may bring you heartache Do you take the path or do you stand still? The path will help you grow The path will help you succeed Do you take the path or do you stand still? by ~Amber~
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Nov 5, 2006 18:46:21 GMT -5
Post by Raven Angela Shroud on Nov 5, 2006 18:46:21 GMT -5
I like it. It's a little repetative, but if you added more between the stand stills, then I think there'd be an even better poem, but still, for something you just felt like writing at the moment, that is good.
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Nov 5, 2006 19:51:03 GMT -5
Post by amber on Nov 5, 2006 19:51:03 GMT -5
Thank you ;D
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